Imagination - Creativity – Inspiration
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Easter
An Essay by Bobby Dykeman
Easter
is awesome! Easter is a wonderful time to hang out with friends and
family to catch up. For me though, I just like to fool around with my
friends and play. This Easter was one of the best ever!
This
Easter, my friends came over for brunch and an Easter egg hunt. We spent
a long time setting up for the egg hunt. We hung the colorful plastic
eggs from strings under the deck and on trees in the backyard. It looked
so cool when we were finished! It was all worth it in the end.
To
make the hunt even more fun, along with the candy, we put letters in
the eggs too. These letters at the end would be unscrambled to spell the
words CHOCOLATE BUNNY! One boy, Nicholas, guessed what the letters
would spell from the minute my dad said there were fourteen letters.
Nicole didn’t get any letters and claimed she was “too cool”.
After
the hunt we went inside to watch Harry Potter and the Chamber of
Secrets. It was the perfect way to calm down from all the excitement of
the Easter egg hunt. We watched Harry play Quidditch and kill a
Basilisk. I loved this Easter.
Easter is a very special holiday to me. It is one of my favorites! I hope everyone had a happy Easter this year.
Now I have one last question for you. What does Easter mean to you?
Lost and Found
A short story by Wildflower
It’s
a beautiful beach day. After some long hours of surfing and diving into
the waves, I became so hungry that my stomach started making funny
noises. I jumped out of the water, walking over to my beach bag and dug
out a packet of my favorite cookies. As soon as my pale, wrinkle finger
picked out the first cookie, my stomach rumbled even louder.
Just
then I made a big mistake, a very big one. I was hungry alright but at
the same time I was also curious to know how loud my own stomach could
sound. So instead of eating the first cookie right away, I kept holding
the cookie under my nose, a quarter inch from my mouth. And how amazing!
My stomach was not just rumbling louder, it growled, growing so loud,
that it was growling like a monster! I couldn't help but smile with the
thought that there was actually a monster inside my tummy and I would do
anything to stop it from growling at me. While I was smiling and
thinking my interesting thought, a “SQUAWK” sound blasted my ear drums
and my precious cookie was snatched out of my fingers. “squawk, squawk,
squawk!” a big seagull was flying away with my cookie.
” Thief!
Ugly seagull thief!” I was so mad, I swung my hands above my head and
chased after the bird thief. I was so mad to think that the chase
between a bird and a human was never a match won. I was so mad to
realize that while swinging my hands after the bird, I dropped all my
cookies into the water. And worse, in a blink, a dozen of seagulls
gathered around me for a surprised feast. Some gratefully thanked me
with a generous dropping on my head. I was dumfounded, humiliated and so
mad at myself. All I could do was dip my head into the water and clean
away the bird dropping.
- “ Don’t you throw that plastic onto the water?”
I
was startled. I looked up and saw a girl my age staring at me with a
challenging look. It took me a long second to realize she meant the
empty cookie bag still in my hand. Without saying a word, I walked past
her toward the garbage can. My face was getting hotter and my legs
became heavy as I could feel her eyes still on me. The only good news
was the monster inside me seemed to be calmer. It might be too sad to
growl...
- “That’s my favorite cookie by the way” she shouted after me.
God, leave me alone I prayed but still said nothing.
But the girl didn’t seem to take my silence as a hint. She quickened her step and caught up to me by the garbage can.
- “I have never seen anyone feed the birds the way you did. It looked really fun!”
I
wished I could disappear into the sand. Just as I turned to walk away,
she reached out her hand and handed me another packet of the same
cookies. At the sight of those cookies, my stomach started growling
louder and louder...
By the way, her name is Ally, she is now my best friend and my worse enemy.
Hunger Game
A film review by Nicole Dykeman
On
March 23, at 6:15 pm, my life was changed. I laughed, I cried, and I
jumped ten feet out of my seat. All of this happened within the course
of two and a half hours at the mall movie theaters.
I waited one
hundred thirty three days. It seemed like one hundred thirty three
years. Yes, I counted. I don’t care if you think I’m a nerd, or a geek,
or another creative name you wish to think up. Do you want to know why?
It
was worth it. The Hunger Games movie had to be the best book based
movie I’ve ever seen in my entire time on this planet. Every “i” was
dotted, and every “t” was crossed. They really hit the nail on the head
this time.
Normally movies based on books are really terrible in
comparison, one terrifically awful example being the Percy Jackson
movie. It was nothing like the book, and I was ashamed of it. For
example, one of the characters, Annabeth, was supposed to be a blonde,
and in the movie she was a brunette. For the Hunger Games movie,
Jennifer Lawrence dyed her hair from blonde to brown to be Katniss, Josh
Hutcherson dyed his hair from brown to blonde so he looked more like
Peeta, and Liam Hemsworth dyed his hair from blonde to brown to look
like Gale. Even the extras on set let the stylists dye their hair insane
colors like blue and pink to be citizens of the Capitol!
The
Harry Potter movies were actually well written, and most details were
similar to the books. I mean, I understand that you can’t make a seven
hundred page book into a two and a half hour movie and expect every
little detail to be included. That’s why the Hunger Games movie was so
amazing. They only had three hundred pages to transfer to screen.
Even
though the mood of the Hunger Games is very suspenseful and serious,
there were some funny moments included in the movie. Most of those
moments were my favorite parts. There is one scene in the movie where
Katniss slams a knife into the table so it’s sticking out. Another
character, Effie, gasps from across the room and yells, “That is
mahogany!” while Haymitch, Katniss and Peeta’s mentor tells Katniss,
“Congratulations, you just killed a table!”
Every bit of this
movie had terrific acting. One of the best scenes in the movie takes
place right before Katniss is going to be sent up the tube to the Hunger
Games arena. Katniss is being comforted by her stylist, Cinna, who is
played by singer Lenny Kravitz. Jennifer Lawrence does a phenomenal job
at making herself seem completely terrified, from the expression on her
face, to the way she talks, and the way her body is shaking
uncontrollably. It was so emotional, and it made me cry. The realistic
acting is the same reason I cried when Katniss was speaking to her
little sister and best friend Gale for the last time before she has to
get on the train for the Capitol, and at the death of Rue, an innocent
twelve year old sent along with Katniss to the heart-breaking fight to
the death the government broadcasts on television.
I nearly had a
heart attack when Peeta and Katniss are attacked by mutated dogs in the
arena. It had suddenly gone completely silent and dark, and I knew it
was coming too, because I read the books! Yet I still jumped out of my
skin when the hideous monsters attacked.
Not only was reading
these books and watching the movie enjoyable, but I learned a lot.
Katniss is a great role model not just for girls, but for all young
people in general. She is a strong independent individual who always
puts her family before herself, just like when she volunteered to go to
the Hunger Games so her sister Prim didn’t have to. I decided to start
living my life as Katniss would, doing more for my family and making
careful choices, knowing it affects everyone around me what I do. Maybe
I’ll even start braiding my hair and take up archery – then I’ll be just
like Katniss!
Comments for Children’s Writing Club
Essay: “Easter” by
Bobby Dykeman
Not only did Bobby turn Easter into a literary event, the
hunt itself was literary! This essay
was charming and really conveyed the excitement of the Easter celebration. I could visualize the fun everyone had in
setting it up—perhaps just as much as the hunt itself. I would like to have known more about the
idea for using “Chocolate Bunny” in the eggs. Who came up with it, and how did
it work? Did each egg have a single letter?
This was not clear and if Bobby had spent a little more time explaining
it, it would have made the essay even better. As a writer, you always have to
keep your reader in mind, and realize that the reader knows nothing until you
explain it.
Story: “Lost and Found” by Wildflower.
This story, which has at its center
a grumbling stomach, is very original. I
remember when I was young and my stomach would grumble, and how embarrassing
that was. I hadn’t thought of it in
years. That no longer seems to happen,
but this story brings back the memory in vivid detail and the embarrassment
that went along with those stomach noises.
There are nice images here: for
example, the “pale wrinkled finger” from having been in the water so long. The
story takes an great little twist at the end with the appearance of another
girl, her warning not to throw the plastic bag into the water, and the
narrator’s embarrassed response. How a
potential fight turns into a friendship makes a splendid ending.
Review: Hunger Game by Nicole Dykeman
Thank you, Nicole, for explaining to
this out-of-touch adult why the Hunger Games is such a huge phenomenon. It seemed to come out of nowhere and now it
is the talk of the country. Thanks to
you, I not only understand what it’s all about but why it’s so popular. As a critic, you did a good job of telling
about the movie without giving away the plot, and also conveying its
excitement. I liked your descriptions of
the acting. Your tears and fears—telling
readers about them was strong evidence of the movie’s power. Reflecting on what you learned gives the movie
an added dimension. It actually makes me
want to see it!
P.S. I had my hair cut today, and
the people in the salon were talking about the movie. Nothing they said gave me the sense of it the
way Nicole’s review did.
--Mary Walton
Mary Walton is a member of Neptune public library and a published author of 16 books
http://www.allbookstores.com/Mary-Walton/author